Saturday, October 13, 2007

that thing i did...

Aisi Rimjhim Aisi Puhaaren

Aisi Hi Thi Barsaat

The sky turned a steel grey,

The clouds had something to say…

The winds tried playing with my hair,

It may rain hard here…

Or leave behind just a fond tear….

Khud Se Judaa Aur Jug Se Paraaye

Hum Dono The Saath

We walked together-our fingers searching for eternity,

Our hearts showed us the way to serenity….

We drank with our eyes-the red wine from love’s grail,

Our eyes met, our desires set sail-

Just the beginning of our tale…

Phir Se Woh Saawan Ab Kyon Na Aaye

It hurts only when I breathe…

Shattering of our blue confetti dream,

Fading away of our little world into the blinding beam.

It rains again today-

The clouds again have something to say….

They cry on me-drenching me with their pain….

Din Dhal Jaye Par Raat Na Aaye…….


P.S:this is something i used to do long time back,i used to take paragraphs of some of my favourite songs and then try creating poetry with what the lines meant to me...this one's from "Guide"

26 comments:

Neel said...

nice one. simple flow of thoughts...yet captivating...makes you imagine. I could almost feel the moment! the song is one of my all time favourites. I love to sing it on a stormy rainy night when there's a powercut especially! But why did the blue confetti dream shatter?

little boxes said...

@neel:it didnt
i just imagined that it did...

The Mad Girl said...

beautiful!!U write love poems like no one else!!loved it.and the song of course is beautiful.

^*^Clouds^*^ said...

Beautiful.Spectacular.
This poem really touched my heart.Reminded me of old memories..and how my 'blue confetti dream' shattered..

I think I'll try using song lyrics and composing poetry as well.
But nt now,I feel I just can't write.
:( CAN'T!

little boxes said...

love poems??eh?
i am as romantic as mashed potato!!

little boxes said...

...and clouds,u write well n u know that

Rama The One & Only... said...

well........hifi....and well....hifi

Dream Baron said...

loved the expressions...and yes thank god the dream was shattered
BDC i guess are your initials and the way to pronounce your blog address...

little boxes said...

umm ya...and the dream hasnt been shattered yet (touchwood)

^*^Clouds^*^ said...

@Dream Baron
Why 'thank god the dream shattered'?
@Little Boxes
I'm glad it didn't shatter..I'll pray that it never shatters.

Abhishek Khanna said...

waow

sujaan said...

hey...this is nice!! great idea!!

Dream Baron said...

My dear women,i was talking about the post and the post only, the dream shattering was a perfect end to the post...i did not make the comment co-relating it to any of your personal lives...and yes i do sound sadistic at times because i have been disillusioned many a times..not just by relationships but also by my ambient world...i pray to God for the well being of every lover as i was one myself..but somehow nowadays i have stopped believing in love..its all just one selfish pretence...well i accept that i might be wrong but this is my view even if it is incorrect

little boxes said...

hmm point taken

^*^Clouds^*^ said...

Dream Baron loves to argue
* shows tongue *

* laughs out loud *

^*^Clouds^*^ said...

@Dream Baron

Rege jaashna.Just kidding!

WHAT'S IN A NAME ? said...

This sons right up there on my all-time fav-list. And you have done sound justice to its message here. Only that I would loved ( more) small lines with fluid words..with the same import.
Keep posting!

Cheerio !

speedpost said...

What a brilliant idea! Keep it going.. good post!

inihos said...

nice concept...
and i like da way the words intertwine, even though the language is different

Kulpreet said...

Hindi and English combination. Felt good...

(¯`•._.•[Raaji]•._.•´¯) said...

... and I must say that you are good at it :)

Very creative and pretty :)

Lucid Darkness said...

Innovative. Yes.

Astraeus said...

i think it came out really well..
u used a line and created ur own tapestry of words from it


beautiful

Dream Baron said...

well how about postin something new ??? :-D

little boxes said...

@dream baron:will do.blogging from a cyber cafe isnt the most convenient thing in the world

^*^Clouds^*^ said...

you okay?

no posts?or scraps?